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PostPosted: Fri Jun 19, 2015 10:33 pm 
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Hey. Some of you might remember I wrote a first chapter of an Oolite-inspired novel about a year ago. Well, I have continued the project and now have over half a book drafted (8 chapters so far). The story is basically the same, but I have radically altered the first chapter.

I am attaching the first chapter here. If there is interest, I will continue to add further chapters as I edit them. These chapters should be considered drafts.

Note: Some of the game concepts from Oolite have now been given different names, as I am anticipating turning this into a stand-alone book for publication (e.g. Cubocta = Coriolis). If I decide to go that route, I will be changing ship names and planet names too. I am using the universe of Oolite as a guide for my imagination, but it should be clear that the story is entirely my own!

I hope you enjoy it. Even if you read earlier drafts of chapter one, I encourage reading this, as it is very different.

SALVAGE - Chapter One

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/234955/Salvage.pdf


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PostPosted: Mon Jun 22, 2015 10:38 am 
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You have an excellent descriptive turn of phrase. It is a skill I have always been a little sketchy on.
You must keep us informed as and when you add to this. VERY good work so far sir, a fantastic beginning.

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 22, 2015 11:08 pm 
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Thanks a lot ClymAngus, I get a lift from positive feedback. Do let me know if anything didn't work for you. The one worry I have is that I am very familiar with the world, and I am trying to tread the fine line of giving enough description so the reader knows how everything works, yet not so much as to bore them. Describing the interior of a coriolis is actually a very difficult thing to do, especially when you have to deal with the gravity being "outwards" instead of "down", and inevitably weaker as you move closer to the axis. Things that you really have to get your head round when you're writing action in that environment.

The next chapter, as you'll see, deals with a coriolis that is not functioning at its best. I really hope I managed to convey something understandable to the reader.

Chap 2 is almost edited.

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PostPosted: Tue Jun 23, 2015 10:20 am 
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Nifty. I'm looking forward to it. <no spoilers> The tail end of chapter 1 set the scene for a visceral second chapter.
I'm a fan of the inherent horror of space. The attention to detail in describing the day to day nicely embellishes the catastrophic when it happens.

South Surrey Eh? Large retired population. Peace and quiet. Perfect for writing about big things!

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